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The graph gives information about the consumption of fast food (in grams), in the UK from 1970 to 1990.

The graph gives information about the consumption of fast food (in grams), in the UK from 1970 to 1990.
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The graph illustrates information about the utilization of fast food, in the UK between 1970 and 1990. Units are measured in
grams
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. From the overview, it is crystal clear that the requirement for fish and chips increased significantly during the given 20
years
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 since pizza lovers diminished the eating it, respectively. In terms of the most significant feature of the chart is seafood and potatoes which
firstly
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 were required just below 100
grams
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 in 1970 and had increased gradually, saw its significant hit at 500
grams
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 in 1990. Rolling towards the rest of the information, pizza had been the best seller in 1970
with
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accounting for 300
grams
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 after a decade it had lost its selling proportion and remained stable for the next 10
years
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. In regard to other kinds of food, hamburger seems to be the lowest choice in 1970;
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 showed a slight increase in 15
years
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 and reached just above 100
grams
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 and
then
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 suddenly went up to 300
grams
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 in 5
years
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Vocabulary: Replace the words grams, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 3 times.
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