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Some people think that girls should take husband’s name after marriage while others feel that they should not follow this age old tradition. What is your opinion?

It is argued that the nickname of wives should alter to the same
last
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name
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 of their husbands,
while
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 others believe that should still keep
original
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their original
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name
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 after marriage. In my opinion, I completely disagree that the women are changing their names to the families of men after the wedding day.
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, the
name
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 of
family
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the family
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 girl is given at
the
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apply
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birth which is the origin of her
father
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 and grandfather, In
other word
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another word
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, the woman is
earsing
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erasing
 the history, principles,
roles
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and roles
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 which
is
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are
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 being brought on them.
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, each female is
prouding
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prodding
by
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of
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her father
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father
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father's
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name
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.
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,
famous
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a famous
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father
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 like a doctor, engineer, writer, and scientist which are holding
a
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apply
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bright
name
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 how can remove from identification of her.
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that
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 is why it is important to hand
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father
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the father
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name
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a name
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 that
give
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gives
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 the daughter a higher
postion
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position
 in
the
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society.
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, the marriage may not
be continue
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continue
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 which is ending by
divorced
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divorce
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that
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which
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 is essential cause to removing the
husband
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husband's
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name
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.
Thus
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, which is being spent more time in the transformation
gril
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girl
name
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 to come back to
family
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the family
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. Meanwhile,
protect
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protection
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 from any alteration is a fundamental impact for the daughter to be more confident in the wedding home.
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, many social researchers were discovering that the women still remained names of their fathers more
achievment
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achievement
achievements
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development
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developed
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 in the culture. In
the
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apply
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conclusion,
although
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, some people
is
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are
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 considered
the
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that
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women
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woman
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 should be changing
her
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their
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name
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 to the
last
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name
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 of
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their husband
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husband
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husbands
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 after marriage due it is
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a
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traditional
inhertence
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inheritance
 role.
While
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 others encourage the remaining of origin
name
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Maiden name
  • Patriarchal
  • Familial unity
  • Cultural customs
  • Identity
  • Independence
  • Gender equality
  • Subjugate
  • Outdated practice
  • Hyphenation
  • Professional brand
  • Social significance
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