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Some people think that girls should take husband’s name after marriage while others feel that they should not follow this age old tradition. What is your opinion?

#people #girls #husband’s #name #marriage #age #tradition
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It is argued that the nickname of wives should alter to the same
last
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name
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 of their husbands,
while
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 others believe that should still keep
original
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their original
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name
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 after marriage. In my opinion, I completely disagree that the women are changing their names to the families of men after the wedding day.
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, the
name
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 of
family
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the family
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 girl is given at
the
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apply
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birth which is the origin of her
father
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 and grandfather, In
other word
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, the woman is
earsing
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erasing
 the history, principles,
roles
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and roles
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 which
is
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are
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 being brought on them.
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, each female is
prouding
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prodding
by
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of
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her father
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father
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father's
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name
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.
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,
famous
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a famous
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father
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 like a doctor, engineer, writer, and scientist which are holding
a
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apply
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bright
name
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 how can remove from identification of her.
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that
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 is why it is important to hand
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father
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the father
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name
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a name
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 that
give
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gives
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 the daughter a higher
postion
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position
 in
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society.
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, the marriage may not
be continue
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 which is ending by
divorced
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divorce
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that
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 is essential cause to removing the
husband
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husband's
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name
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.
Thus
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, which is being spent more time in the transformation
gril
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girl
name
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 to come back to
family
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the family
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. Meanwhile,
protect
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protection
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 from any alteration is a fundamental impact for the daughter to be more confident in the wedding home.
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, many social researchers were discovering that the women still remained names of their fathers more
achievment
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achievement
achievements
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development
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 in the culture. In
the
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conclusion,
although
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, some people
is
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are
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 considered
the
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that
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women
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woman
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 should be changing
her
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their
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name
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 to the
last
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name
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 of
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their husband
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husband
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husbands
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 after marriage due it is
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a
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traditional
inhertence
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inheritance
 role.
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 others encourage the remaining of origin
name
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.
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