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You recently bought a piece of sports emunrent from an online store. When You first used the piece of sports equipment, you found a problem with it. Write a letter to the manager of the online store. In your letter describe the problem with the piece of sports equipment • • • say what happened because of the problem explain what you would like the company to do

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Dear Sir/Madam, A few days ago, I purchased a
bedminton
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badminton
racket
 from your online store. First of all, the reason I bought it was because I am playing in an inter College competition.
However
, there are some problems that I faced with the
racket
. First of all, the grip of the
racket
 is not made out of
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decent quality, it almost feels like plastic or polythene
as a result
 it
hard
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 to hold it.
Also
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 the material used in
frame
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 is not very good,
that
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 is why it bends easily. I had to buy another one from a different store as tournaments are coming next month and I have to practice on
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 basis. As a
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customer
costomer
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 I want to make you aware that,
this
 product does not do
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justice to the price you sell it for. I want a refund on the
emunrent
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eminent
 because I
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 not want
replacement
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 because the
racket
 is not good enough to use in
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real competition or practice. I will be looking forward
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 your reply. Kind regards, Prabhjot Singh.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

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