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The diagrams below show the existing ground floor plan of a house and a proposed plan for some building work.

The diagrams below show the existing ground floor plan of a house and a proposed plan for some building work.
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The two maps provided depict the potential modifications that would transpire on the ground floor of a house.
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, as can be vividly seen from the given diagrams, a profound metamorphosis is going to take place, especially in the central hall area.
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, five major developments are likely to happen. Looking at the given maps in more detail, we can see that there is no plan to change the two entrance doors
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 the external walls. At the
center
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 of the maps, the right internal wall is going to raze, allowing the living room to become larger,
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 the left internal wall will remain there with adding two internal doors to it in the south.
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 the changes mentioned above, the storage under the stairs is likely to dismantle,
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 the hall.
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, to the left of the kitchen, next to the external walls, kitchen furniture is going to add.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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