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Instead of being held in a different city each time, the Olympic Games should be held at a permanent site. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

#city #time #olympic #games #site
Due to
 the fact that
Olympic
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the Olympic
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Games
 cost a
juge
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huge
 amount of money to the
city
 that held it, many people argue that it would be much better if
that
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they
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 were held
at
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in
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 a permanent
city
.
Although
 I understand
this
 point of view, there are some important reasons to
diasgree
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disagree
 with
this
 idea.
Olympic
Games
 are a
world wiide
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world-wide
 tradition that allows cities
of
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apply
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around the world
have
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to have
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 the opportunity to host
it
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them
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. In spite of the high costs
envolved
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involved
, it can bring a lot of benefits to the
city
 and
also
 to the country. For
isntance
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instance
, the
city
 may have to build
sport
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sports
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 centres, new roads and
also
place
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a place
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 to accommodate the participants.
In addition
, it might be necessary
improve
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to improve
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 the ways of locomotion in the
city
. All these things will be used by the population after the end of the
games
. Another benefit of
helding
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holding
heading
 an
Olympic
Games
 is the improvement of tourism in the
city
. Since
that
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apply
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many countries around the world participate
at
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in
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 the
games
, it is a mundial event which is followed by
thousands
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thousands of
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 millions of people. It makes the host
city
becomes
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become
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 known and
attract
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attracts
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 tourists from many different places.
Consequently
, tourism will increase and generate profits for the
city
, which will benefit not only it
,
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apply
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 but
also
 all
country
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countries
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. In conclusion, after considering that
Olympic
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the Olympic
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Games
 can bring developments in infrastructure and tourism to the
city
 that held it, I strongly disagree with the idea of the
games
be
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being
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 held at a permanent site.
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