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Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest of our lives, while others believe that adult life brings more happiness. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Life
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 is composed
by
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 different phases from
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childhood to
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old age. Many
people
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 would say that their teenage
years
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 were the happiest period of their lives.
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,
this
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 is not true among a large number of
people
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credits
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 their happiness to their adult
life
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.
This
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 essay will discuss both points of view. There are some reasons to
people
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 believe that teenage
years
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 are the best period of their lives. First of all, when
people
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 are between ten to eighteen
years
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 they usually have much more free time because they do not have to work.
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result
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 they spend a lot of time having fun with their friends or other sort of entertainment,
such
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 as playing video games, watching movies or reading books.
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,
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this
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age
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age,
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 their bodies are healthier and more beautiful, without signs of time. In spite of the benefits
ofo
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of
 teenage
years
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, there are some good reasons to consider
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adult
life
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 as the happiest period of our lives. As
people
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 get older they become much more emotionally secure and self-confident and
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 they have more financial independence.
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, they can do whatever they want to and go wherever they wish.
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, they have more
life
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 experiences which
make
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makes
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 them wiser to enjoy the happy moments. They
also
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 know better how to deal with challenges of
life
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 that can bring sad feelings
on
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the
oposite
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opposite
 of when they are younger. In conclusion, both phases of
life
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 can provide happy moments to human beings.
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, in my opinion, adulthood is the happiest phase of
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life
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.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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