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The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given figure illustrates the manufacturing process of noodles.
Overall
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, there are a total of 8 steps. In the first
step
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, flour is stored in huge buildings called silos.
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, after passing through different stages,
lastly
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 in stage 8 packaging is performed, from where it is sent for distribution. Like mentioned above,
firstly
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 the flour is stored in huge storage silos.
Secondly
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, the flour is mixed with water and oil, followed by converting it into sheets called Dough sheets,
that is
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 the third
step
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.
Whereas
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, in the fourth
step
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, the sheets are turned into strips. Later, in stage 5th noodles are separated into discs
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where it is cooked with oil and
then
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 kept for drying, which is the 6th
step
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. Stage 7th is the part where the noodles are added to cups and mixed with vegetables
as well as
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 spices. Afterwards, in
8th
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step
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 the cups are
labeled
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labelled
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 and at the same time
being
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sealed.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words step with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufactured
  • ingredients
  • dough
  • rolled out
  • thin strips
  • steaming process
  • partially cooked
  • fried
  • dehydrating
  • packaged
  • distribution
  • quality control
  • standards
  • flavoring powder
  • sauce packet
  • traditional pasta
  • dehydration
  • instant cooking
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