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The table below shows the percentage of adults in urban and rural areas who took part in four free time activities in 1990 and 2010. Summarize the information and compare where relevant, by selecting and reporting the key features. You should write at least 150 words.

The table below shows the percentage of adults in urban and rural areas who took part in four free time activities in 1990 and 2010. Summarize the information and compare where relevant, by selecting and reporting the key features. You should write at least 150 words.
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The given table illustrates how many youngsters in far and urban
spotes
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spots
taked
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take
taken
takes
 four leisure time
activites
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activities
 ( Reading, Animated play, Playing and Photography) over 2 decades period from 1990 to 2010.
Overall
, what stands out from the table is that
,
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 reading was the most popular
activity
 for both Urban and Rural
people
 during the period in question.
while
 Photography bottom
the
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 list for Urban area
people
 during 1990.
in addition
, Urban
spots
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 individuals who
interested
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were interested
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 in Animated play remained in constant numbers
throughtout
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throughout
 the period. It is
clearly
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clear
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 that, in 1990 reading in urban places was the most popular
activity
 for
people
 and accounted for 61
person
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people
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.
the
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it saw a slight
increas
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increase
 around
tess
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less
 than fifth during 2010.
futhermore
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Furthermore
, rural
recidents
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residents
 who
are
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love reading were more than the
urbans
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urban
 by 10% in 1990. and both rural and urban
people
 were equal in 2010.
then
 in
1990
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,1990
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 animated play started with 10
person
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people
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 and 18
person
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people
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 from urban and rural
area
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areas
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. after
than
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that
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people
 in far places decreased slightly around 4%.
while
 those in urban remained unchanged
during
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for
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 20 years.
beside
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besides
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 that, photography
activity
 in 1990 was the least
familier
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familiar
activity
 for both
people
category
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categories
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nevertheless
, it witnessed a significant increase
by
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of
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 17 for
urbans
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urban
 and 24
fpr
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for
 rural area
people
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words activity, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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