In many cities, planners tend to arrange shops, schools, offices and homes in specific areas and separate them from each other. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages (Social)?
In many urban need disadvantages
areas
, planners tend to arrange shops
, schools, offices
and houses in specific places and separate them from each other. Although
this
policy can bring demerits including, increase
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increasing
need
of Add an article
the need
people
to use
their cars. I believe the merits of this
trend exceed downsides
because it can Correct article usage
the downsides
mtigate
Correct your spelling
mitigate
traffic
congestion and rate
of Correct article usage
the rate
crime
.
On the one hand, the primary downside of arrange
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arranging
shops
, schools, offices
and homes
in specific areas
and separate
them from each other is Wrong verb form
separating
Correct article usage
the increase
increase
need Wrong verb form
increased
people
to Change preposition
for people
use
their vehicles in cities. For example
, people
need to travel long distance
from their Fix the agreement mistake
distances
homes
to shops
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and mall
mall
, which Fix the agreement mistake
malls
wast
Wrong verb form
wastes
considerable
Correct article usage
a considerable
aomng
for Correct your spelling
amount
people
in order to commuting
. Replace the word
commute
Furthermore
, more need to use
cars mean
more air pollution Correct subject-verb agreement
means
releases
from cars. Wrong verb form
released
Therefore
, the quality of air will decrease, which make
Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
people
are
more vulnerable to Unnecessary verb
apply
get
chronic diseases namely, cancer, heart attack, Wrong verb form
getting
high
blood pressure.
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and high
On the other hand
, I would like to argue the beneftis
of Correct your spelling
benefits
this
development significantly
more than Add a missing verb
are significantly
downsides
. The first advantage of Correct article usage
the downsides
this
trend is can contribute to alleviate
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alleviating
traffic
jams in urban areas
. To illustrate, for example
, when the offices
are separate from school
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the school
this
can reduce traffic
volume in
both Change preposition
on
road
toChange to a plural noun
roads
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the
offices
and school
. Correct article usage
the school
Consequently
, this
trend can minimize of
travelling time for Change preposition
apply
people
, which make
Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
people
live more convenient. The second advantage of Change noun form
people's
this
policy is can contribute to reducing rate
of Add an article
the rate
crime
in cities . This
is because separating houses from shops
can minimize inhabitants around homes
. As a result
, if the number of people
around homes
places Change the noun form
home
decline
Change the verb form
declines
this
mean
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means
homes
are less likely to exposure to crime
.
To sum up
, Although
arrange
Wrong verb form
arranging
shops
, schools, offices
and homes
in specific areas
and separate
them from each other can bring drawbacks Wrong verb form
separating
such
as , raise
Wrong verb form
raising
Add an article
the
of
individuals to Change preposition
for
use
their vehicles. I think the upsides of this
development greater outweighCorrect article usage
the
due to
it can alleviate traffic
jam
and Fix the agreement mistake
jams
rate
of Correct article usage
the rate
crime
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