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In many parts of the world, children's lives were very different from today. What do you think were the advantages and disadvantages of life for children in the past ?

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In the past,
children
's lifestyles were extremely different compared to today's
children
.These differences between
children
 in the past and today include many pros and cons. There are plenty of both advantages and disadvantages of
children
's life in the past.
For instance
,on the positive side,
children
 spent their free time playing with other
children
 who lived nearby.
Consequently
,they learnt a lot of things
such
 as contact with others,
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 themselves when they quarrelled with each other and other things.And they were the healthy cause of did much effort when they played with
children
.Of course,these things were useful for every child.
Moreover
,on the downside,they had not enough time to study because of spending more time with other
children
.
Also
,they had
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 opportunity to study any subject.Because of
this
,in the past , parents had plenty of
children
.They had to go their work and do all the work of the household.
On the other hand
,they had many commercial problems.So, they did not attend to each of their
children
.And because of playing with friends,
children
 couldn't help
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their parents
in
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 chores.
Also
,it was difficult to learn information about some
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.A lack of techniques
such
 as
computer
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 and mobile phones may
causes
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to
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this
 condition.Because,if these techniques would be in the past,
children
 would get knowledge very easily.
To conclude
,in the past ,there were not only
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advantages
,
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but
also
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disadvantages
of
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children
's
lifetime
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.
Thus
,they got used to everything in their lifestyle.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • extended family
  • support system
  • cultural traditions
  • hands-on learning
  • practical skills
  • economic independence
  • leisure time
  • infant mortality rates
  • physical health
  • creativity
  • family income
  • distractions from technology
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