In many families nowadays, both parents work and pay people to look after their children. Some people believe this is not good for families. To what extend do you agree or disagree?
In the present
time
,Parents
pay other people
to look after their children
.Some people
think that this
is not a good thing to do.I agree with the people
who think this
is wrong.
On one hand,If we look at today's time
we will find that it is very difficult to manage the finances of a family with a single father.So, Both parents
have to work in order to manage the family funds.As a result
, parents
do not get enough time
to look after their children
. So, they pay people
inorder
to take their services for their Correct your spelling
in order
children
.For example
, According to
a survey, the type of organizations who look after people
's children
, are increasing day by day and they have increased 40% last
year just because in today's time
both parents
have to work.This
is the reason we can say that they have a positive role in our society.
On the other hand
, even though,It is a hard time
it is a fact that no organization can replace the role of parents
in children
's lives no matter how hard they try.In addition
, If parents
do not give their time
to their children
they will not feel the same connection with their parents
after some time
.For example
, Hassan is a child who has spent most of his life in these types of organizations. He tells me that now at the present time
he does not feel bad if something wrong happens to his parents
because he has not spent enough time
with his parents
Even though, he was in one of the best caretaking companies.So, It is clear from this
example that even though these organisations take good care but child starts to move away from his own parents
and also
starts losing emotions for his own parents
.
In conclusion,We can easily say that it is not good for both parents
to work and pay people
to look after their children
. I agree with communities who believe this
is not good for families.Submitted by Saad Kamal on
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