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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is banned private cars in certain city centers. It is undeniable that vehicles has become an essential part of our life.

#cars #city #centers #vehicles #part #life
One
 of the widely discussed issues nowadays is
banned
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banning
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 private
cars
 in certain
city
centers
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centres
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. It is undeniable that vehicles
has
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 become an essential part of our life.
However
, there is no absolute agreement as some
people
 find
prohibition
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 of use of the
cars
 beneficial,
while
 others consider everything associated with prohibition
negatively
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. Surely, there are both pros and
cos
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cons
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 to
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the vehicle
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vehicle
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vehicles
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 but I believe
advantages
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the advantages
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 outweigh
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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.
One
 of the main positives of
ban
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the ban
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 is that most
people
 will use public transport frequently
that
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which
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 will reduce traffic jams on the road.
For instance
,
city
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the city
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Hamburg
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of Hamburg
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 which is banned
usage
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 of transport. The government offered
moving
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to move
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 by
walk
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walking
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 or
bicycles
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bicycle
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 and allows pedestrian access through parks. Another advantage is that decreasing emissions coming from
the
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cars
. Emissions are little by little destroying our ozone layer, so
ban
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the ban
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 will cut down
harm
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the harm
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 of
ozone
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the ozone
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 layer. A good example here is Madrid that
forbidden
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forbids
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 petrol and diesel
cars
 in the
city
 centre, no
one
 without
permissions
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permission
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 of parking can not enter into
centre
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the centre
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due to
"Ultra-low
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the "Ultra-low
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 emissions zone" program. Turning to the other side of the argument, interdiction
cars
 will slow down achieve to
work place
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workplace
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 since
employee
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employees
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 have to
figured
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figure
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 out alternative
route
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routes
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.
In other words
,
the
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in the
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 situation in Almaty, some roads are banned and citizens have to drive bypass
as a result
enormous
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of enormous
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 traffic jams whole
city
. Another major
disadvantages
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 is a cluster of
people
.
Therefore
, it might be
one
 of the
factor
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factors
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 of epidemic and anxiety.
Such
 as COVID-19
that is
 begun in the
city
 of China
due to
huge
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a huge
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 cluster of
people
 and there
is
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will be in
the
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other cities and countries. Having weighed everything mentioned up, we can come to
a
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 conclusion that there are too many pros and
cos
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cons
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 which
is
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can not satisfy citizens and after each prohibition followed by consequences which
is
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can improve or degrade the situation.
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