Eating too much sugar is harmful for our health. Some people think that it is government responsibility to limit the amount of sugar they eat. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Over the
last
20
years
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the amount of
sugar
in daily products which are consumed by
people
has considerably risen and it definitely brings a lot of harm to
human's
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health. Many individuals assume that it is
state's
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the state's
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duty to reduce the amount of
sugar
eaten by
people
,
whereas
others consider that
people
's
life style
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lifestyle
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and
food
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the food
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which
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they consume
by
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their own
is
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not ruled by
government
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the government
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. The objective of
this
essay is to discuss both views
of
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this
topic On the one hand, the
state
has a responsibility for
nation's
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the nation's
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life and it solves problems which are often discussed in society.
This
means that issues which cause alarm in
country
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are tackled by the
state
.
For instance
, if
people
are in
a
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trouble with living conditions or even if they would not have a place to live, the
government
will help them.
Hence
, the
governments
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government's
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main purpose is to make
a
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better conditions for
people
's life.
On the other hand
, food which is eaten by
people
is not
government's
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the government's
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duty. In other quarters, everyone must
controle
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control
what they eat
by
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their own, the
state
is not giving free products to
people
,
inhabitants
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and inhabitants
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always have a choice when they are purchasing foodstuff. As an example of
this
, yoghurt, there are always
a
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plenty of companies which produce
this
and there is
undoubtly
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undoubtedly
that one which produces yoghurt without adding
sugar
.
Consequently
, if
people
consume a lot of
sugar
it is their own fault and the particular reason of it is that they buy it by their own wish not by the
state
's.
To sum up
, from all the aforementioned points we can understand that products which are consumed by
people
are not
controled
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controlled
by the
government
,
person
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the person
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who has a desire
to
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sugar
will find it anywhere, even if he will order it from another country. As far as I am concerned, if
people
had been responsible for their actions and if the ministry had not been blamed for everything, our country would develop
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way faster.
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