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The chart shows the sales of five different kinds of jam from 2009 to 2014

The chart shows the sales of five different kinds of jam from 2009 to 2014
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The line graph describes information on a variety of jams sold between 2009 and 2014.
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, all jams except the plum variety showed rising trends during the 5-year period. Looking at the chart, Strawberry Jam had the biggest market in 2009 at just over 3
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. From there, these sales
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 progressively increased, which eventually more than doubled in 2014.
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although
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 Grape Jam had the lowest
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 in 2009, the
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 was constantly rising and reaching their peak in 2014 at around 4.5
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. Meanwhile, Raspberry and Cherry showed some fluctuations.
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Raspberry had a slight increase in demand from 2 to around 3.5 items in 2011, which was followed by a significant rise in 2012 to just above 5 items.
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 number began to slow down and had its biggest point in 2014, at around 4.5
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 in 2014. Interestingly, the Cherry jam market fluctuated throughout the years. It started with just below 2
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 in 2009, which went up in 2010 before declining to its lowest number in 2011. From there, it reached its peak at 3 before slowly declining in 2014.
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,
in contrast
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 to others, the plum
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 steadily dropped from start to finish, from approximately 2.5 in 2009 to 0 in 2014.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words units, sale with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slow" was used 2 times.
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