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In many countries around the world young people decide to leave their parents’ home once they finish school. They start living on their own or sharing a home with friends. Is this a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples

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The trend of living styles is a topical issue in the present world. Youngsters in modern days prefer to reside alone or with their mates since they get graduation
instead
 of living with their parents. I personally assert
this
 issue is beneficial to
progress
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the progress
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our
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of our
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 society. Indubitably, as
people
 consider living with their parents or becoming independent in many different ways,
however
, it serves numerous
mertis
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merits
 for our nations. Foremost, since they settle far from their families or relatives, they can learn several essential skills to stay by themselves. To be more detailed, they have opportunities to know how to manage their
finaces
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finances
as well as
 clean their places. To be elaborated
further
, they can possess
converstaion
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conversation
conversational
 skills to interact with their
neighbors
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neighbours
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 for not only producing harmonious environments and give a hand thick and thin when it comes to
challengeable
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 problems to both
of
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them.
Furthermore
, as
human
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humans
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 rely on each other, it is
also
 contributed to
expand
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 their horizon in
relationship
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relationships
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.
In addition
, when residents move
their
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from their
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 hometown to other cultures,
it
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they
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 can be inspired
to
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others to make unique culture compared to both
original
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the original
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 and new
place's
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place
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 culture.
Therefore
, it allows
people
 to develop
people
's habitat in various procedures. Apart from that, young
people
 can enhance their creativity and imagination since they suffer from diverse events
while
 they live alone or
their
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with their
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 peers. In connection with
this
, they have more
possibilites
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possibilities
 to invent new devices or discover ideas to lead our earth better. In a nutshell,
although
 there may be detrimental impacts on our advancements, I still contend that residing separately from their families
show
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 huge advantages for our lifestyles.
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