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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between 2000 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between 2000 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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This
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 table chart illustrates, by type of secondary school, the population of students in the year 2000, 2005 and 2009.
Overall
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, all
schools
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 except for
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schools
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 experienced a downward trend throughout the whole time frame. At the beginning of the year, Voluntary-controlled
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 accounted for half of the proportion at 52%, which was the largest percentage.
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 the percentage of Grammar
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 was the second largest at 24%, that of Specialist
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 and
Community
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Schools
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 was the same proportion at 12%. In 2005,
Community
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Schools
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 depicted significant growth and increased by 20%.
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 the remaining
schools
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 showed a decline, Voluntary-controlled
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 remained the highest percentage at 38%.
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, in 2009,
Community
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Schools
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 kept increasing to 58% and exceeded Voluntary-controlled
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, which had 20%. Other proportions of
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 had still a downward trend, Specialist
Schools
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 and Grammar
Schools
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 had 10% and 12%, respectively.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words schools, community with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
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