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Write about the following topic: ‘It is important for foreigners to know something about the history and culture of the country they live in.’ Discuss. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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History plays a vital role in one's life. Only through the past history, do we get to know the vast cultures and historical value of the
country
 they live in.
This
 essay will give a brief explanation of it.
Firstly
, It is important for foreigners to have some idea about the
country
. .
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.
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It's always better for students who wish to study in a new
country
 to have a brief idea about the
country
's language and socio-economic patterns as they will be living in the same society. Basic information makes them
well prepared
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well-prepared
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.
For instance
, the Foreign Exchange Programme conducted by Osmania
University
 , helped individuals to know about the cultural value , religious practices and traditions of people living in Ohio even before they enrolled at Ohio
University
.
This
 information helped the new students to be prepared and won't
made
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make
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 them feel like fish out of the pond in the initial days at the
university
.
However
, it is not a compulsion that individuals shall do the groundwork before going to the new city. The majority of the young generation do not do the
basework
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base work
 before going as they want to experience everything ad gain knowledge through personal experience.
For instance
, 87% of
university
-going students of class 2022-2023 at Loyola
University
 opted to go to the new
country
 for their higher education without knowing the
country
's cultural values as they wished to experience it with time.
Hence
, I believe that knowing the historical culture or tradition of a new
country
 totally depends upon
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individual's preferences.
However
, being well prepared is better than being stranded in an unknown
country
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • integration
  • expatriate
  • societal norms
  • cultural faux pas
  • culturally diverse
  • historical events
  • cultural practices
  • assimilation
  • cross-cultural communication
  • local traditions
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