Some people are of the view that hobbies need to be difficult for people to be able to enjoy them well.

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People

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found new

activities

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when they are in

leasure

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leisure

time for enjoying,

such

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as playing games, reading books, and some

people

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believe that

hobbies

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should be complicated for

enjoyable

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enjoyment

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this

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essay

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I will discuss my opinions which

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I agree or disagree with some examples. First and foremost, there are two types of

activities

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, indoor and outdoor

activities

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, indoor action contains playing games, reading, watching films and, outdoor

works

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consists of sports I mean football, swimming, jogging, gardening, travelling. As I emphasized, generally these

activities

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are not difficult.

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person

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a person

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does not need to spend extra effort

for

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play games or

read

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reading

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the

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apply

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book, it

depend

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activity

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the activity

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, I want to say that I do not agree with

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statement. Second and foremost,

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however

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there are some

hobbies

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that humans really have to allocate most of their time for these actions

for

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learn

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them

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apply

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, which is these

activities

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are so satisfying and hard. As an example I can show to

lear

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learn

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to play

music

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musical

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instruments,

people

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go to piano recitals for five years and learning play

piano

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the piano

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, To my mind it is

ardous

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arduous

but enjoyable and

people

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can get self-improvement by these methods. In my point of view, I can agree with

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idea only in

this

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situation because as I said the

difficuly

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difficulty

difficult

hobby

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the hobby

a hobby

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depens

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depends

activity

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the activity

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majority

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the majority

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hobbies

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are entertaining and hard

activities

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gain

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apply

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us more

dopomine

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dopamine

that's why

people

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can think

hobbies

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need to be difficult for

people

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to be able to enjoy them well,

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however

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that is

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not true. Because if someone doing their work or other

leasure

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leisure

time activity which they love,

this

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will be amusing. It does not matter how

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apply

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ardous

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arduous

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

287 words

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