Tv is dangerous because it destroys family life and any sense of community; instead of visiting people or talking with our family we just watch TV.

We prefer

spend

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our time watching

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, rather than

communicate

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communicating

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with our relatives or family.

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, there was an opinion that

the

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apply

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destroys families and has a bad effect on communication skills. I choose

life

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without a

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because, lately, no one controls what we are shown.

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, there were

such

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reality shows in which people find a mate for each other and openly show their personal lives, quarrels, resentments, or vice versa, how they buy too expensive houses and cars,

how

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and how

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they give each other not cheap gifts.

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penetrates the subconscious of ordinary people and they begin to act imitating the main characters, making claims to their soulmate.

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films

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with

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apply

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happy

ending

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endings

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are often shown on

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, which is

also

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not the same for everyone in real

life

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. Many of us believe that at least

films

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should be positive in our boring environment, but I think reality should not be absent. Man himself is the builder of his own

life

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, and how good his

life

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depends only on him.

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, in

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films

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we are shown only a

colorful

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world:

such

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as beautiful houses, actors dressed in fashionable clothes that they change every day,

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and

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enough money, which to some extent does not fit with the real

life

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of people. So they begin to want the same thing, and

this

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often leads to robberies and murders in order to have more money.

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, there are

also

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good quantities. Watching instructive cartoons and

films

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awakes good human qualities, especially doing something good

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for

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others like helping and protecting them. It is important to follow the information received through it. In conclusion,

above all

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, you need to understand how receptive you are. Because despite the fact that you only see the luxury

life

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, you will realize that you have to work hard to have a decent

life

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Aug 8, 2023

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