Tv is dangerous because it destroys family life and any sense of community; instead of visiting people or talking with our family we just watch TV.

We prefer
spend
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our time watching
TV
, rather than
communicate
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communicating
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with our relatives or family.
Therefore
, there was an opinion that
the
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TV
destroys families and has a bad effect on communication skills. I choose
life
without a
TV
because, lately, no one controls what we are shown.
Firstly
, there were
such
reality shows in which people find a mate for each other and openly show their personal lives, quarrels, resentments, or vice versa, how they buy too expensive houses and cars,
how
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and how
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they give each other not cheap gifts.
This
penetrates the subconscious of ordinary people and they begin to act imitating the main characters, making claims to their soulmate.
Secondly
,
films
with
a
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happy
ending
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endings
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are often shown on
TV
, which is
also
not the same for everyone in real
life
. Many of us believe that at least
films
should be positive in our boring environment, but I think reality should not be absent. Man himself is the builder of his own
life
, and how good his
life
depends only on him.
Thirdly
, in
films
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,films
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we are shown only a
colorful
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world:
such
as beautiful houses, actors dressed in fashionable clothes that they change every day,
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and
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enough money, which to some extent does not fit with the real
life
of people. So they begin to want the same thing, and
this
often leads to robberies and murders in order to have more money.
On the other hand
, there are
also
good quantities. Watching instructive cartoons and
films
awakes good human qualities, especially doing something good
to
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others like helping and protecting them. It is important to follow the information received through it. In conclusion,
above all
, you need to understand how receptive you are.  Because despite the fact that you only see the luxury
life
on
TV
, you will realize that you have to work hard to have a decent
life
.
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