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Some peeule believe that the good leadership born, whereas others hold the opinion that the leadership qualities could be obtained during the life. Who represents the good leader qualities indeed?

Nowadays, the person
who
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 people consider a
leader
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 and who goes into success has a special
life
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 role in
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 sphere. Some people's view is that good leaders are born; others believe that
leadership
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qualities
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 can be learned throughout
life
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. I think that it depends on the situation
if
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of
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 the person who obtained the
qualities
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 of it or who
born
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 with those
qualities
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. The best leaders who were considered born with those talents actually related to different kinds of changes that they represented themselves. There is another view that if the
leader
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's
parents
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 were successful people with
leadership
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qualities
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 in their lives,
then
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 it will bring to the world a future commander who will be born with the same talents as their
parents
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. Sometimes, it is hard to say if a situation arises where the
leader
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, who was born with special talents, confronts it and,
after
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this
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 situation, if he is capable of achieving success. The
leader
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 who obtained all the experiences that took him to success may not have been born with the same capacity that
are
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 most required in
leadership
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qualities
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. In fact, most leaders with many
qualities
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 learned all of
this
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 through their experiences.
On the other hand
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, whose
parents
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 were less disciplined, sometimes because of their unsuccessful experiences
of
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life
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, it makes sense to tend their children to learn all important requirements to have higher
qualities
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 of
leadership
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while
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 experiencing
life
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 with their
parents
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.

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