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The pie charts below show average household expenditure in Hong Kong and Britain in the year 2000.

The pie charts below show average household expenditure in Hong Kong and Britain in the year 2000.
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The two pie charts compare the expenses for
household
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households
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 in Hongkong and in
UK
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the UK
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 in 2000.
Overall
, it can be seen that clothing is the least of expenditure for
household
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a household
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 in both countries.
Conversely
, other goods and housing occupy
largest
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the largest
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percentage
 of spending in
UK
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the UK
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 and in Hongkong.
While
 housing witnessed the highest
percentage
 of household spending in
Hong
Kong
 in 2000 with 32%,
this
 expense in
United
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the United
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 Kingdom experienced much less
to compare
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compared
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 with
Hong
Kong
, only 18%.
In contrast
, clothing recorded the lowest
percentage
 of expenses for
house
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houses
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 in Britain and in
Hong
Kong
 in 2000, with respective
figure
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figures
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 of 7% and 4%. The
percentage
 of expenditure
for
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on
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 food in both nations were nearly the same, 22% in
UK
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the UK
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 and 27% in
Hong
Kong
.
In addition
, people in Britain had to spend nearly double for transport compared with
inhabitant
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inhabitants
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 in
Hong
Kong
, with
the
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apply
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respective figures of 17% and 9% .
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, hong, kong with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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