Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you thing this is a positive or a negative development?

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These days, a growing number of

people

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have

health

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issues and trying to take medicines and treatment

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they can come to visit their

doctor

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. In my point of view, it had both a positive side and

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negative side which are discussed in

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essay. On the one side,

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apply

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more and more citizens

take

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are taking

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care of themselves

instead

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of going to visit the

doctor

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will save them time. As a part of fact,

people

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who were taken disease can research the solution to improve their

health

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because now it appears in every corner of the Internet.

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according to

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the figure analysed the number of

people

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who can get treatment knowledge now is

raising

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little by little with the internet where they can share the ways to fight the disease easily.

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, not only saves time but

also

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money, based on the fact that the cost of each

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the

doctor

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is still so expensive for most

people

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so home treatments are still the better choices for them. But they must be careful with these types of treatments and medicines because every mistake always affects their body

turning

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making it

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worse. On the opposite, the

doctor

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also

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an expert in their area of work. So coming to the

doctor

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and taking the medicines they have listed will be more effective ways to be healthy, especially for the

elder

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. And

people

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who visit their usual

doctor

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will not be afraid anymore of their

health

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problems. Every wealthy

people

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always

chose

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the best options for their

health

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and visiting doctors will be a perfect choice that can not be skipped.

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, the citizens who choose

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way

are

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apply

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usually not

having

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financial problems because it is not cheap. In conclusion, depending on the finances and the lifestyle of each person there are both negative and positive

development

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developments

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to improve their

health

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Alexandre Harvey Tue Aug 08 2023

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Provide a clear thesis statement in the introduction to state your opinion on whether this is a positive or negative development.

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Support your ideas with more specific examples or evidence.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

312 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

alternative medicines
treatments
positive development
negative development
health problems
usual doctor
access
personalized approach
holistic well-being
lack of regulation
evidence-based research
proper medical treatment

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