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As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#internet #newspapers
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In the current
world
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, it can be seen clearly that the more internet connection and online NEWS
magazines
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 are becoming widespread and more accessible, the less paper
magazines
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 are being bought by people. I wholeheartedly agree with the formerly mentioned assertion based on some compelling reasons which will be discussed in detail. The first reason why I agree with
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 statement is that online
newspapers
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 and online
magazines
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 are more user-friend and convenient than
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paper
magazines
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. Every single person, in every situation or location that it is, can access a wide range of
newspapers
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 which have been published in different countries all around the
world
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, with a simple click and
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, it can take those information resources everywhere that it goes easily.
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, it is not necessary to pass a long distance to get to a kiosk to purchase a local newspaper.
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, in the modern lifestyles that individuals have in
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 fast-speed
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, choosing the classic format of
newspapers
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 could not be a sensible choice. The second reason for
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 agreement is the financial benefits that reading news online could have.
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 everybody can read a huge number of
magazines
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 and
newspapers
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 by just paying an insignificant amount of annual membership cost for an internet connection on its smartphone, the allocation of a great amount of money to purchase classic forms of
newspapers
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 has
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financial justification.
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, in the modern
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, the utilization of wireless internet systems is becoming more and more common among the people who are living
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this
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 planet, it is my firm conviction that purchasing the old-fashion and out-of-date format
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newspapers
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 not only is not an appropriate choice but
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 it is not worth financially any more.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Access
  • Convenient
  • Fast
  • Expensive
  • Wider range
  • News sources
  • Perspectives
  • Readership
  • Demographics
  • Physical
  • Tangible
  • Reading experience
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