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In the future all cars, buses and trucks Will be The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages Of driverless Vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

In the future all cars, buses and trucks Will be The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages Of driverless Vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?
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 of modern technology and its achievements, most
of
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the
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scientists and experts are of the opinion that cars, buses and trucks will be controlled without
driver
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drivers
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 in the future and people who are commuters and passengers will be only inside those vehicles. İn my opinion,
however
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 there are a
lot
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 merits and
dimerits
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demerits
 of
this
, its advantages surpass its disadvantages.
To begin
, as I said before,
i
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 think that there are several good and bad points.
For example
, one of the big advantages of
being
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driverless cars and buses is that will not happen any car accidents or at least
quantity
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 of
this
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 will go down in the future. İn our
time
, reasons
of
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 accidents are related to human errors
such
 as being drunk or
pay
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paying
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 little attention to important signs. İmprovement of technology,
this
 will decrease significantly.
Furthermore
, people already spend their
time
to do
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 different useful things
such
 as reading
book
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books
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 or investigating essential information so as to widen their outlooks
instead
 of spending their
time
 by driving on roads.
Thus
, they are able to devise new innovative technologies by thinking out of the box and going
to
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the extra
miles
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 because of having adequate
time
.
Also
, some
researchs
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research
researchers
researches
 have proved that existing of some dangerous diseases
has
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 been caused by sitting too much in the car. Developing with driverless cars,
this
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these
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 types of illnesses will be able to decline.
On the other hand
, it
have
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 some critical
dimerits
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demerits
merits
 of
this
. As an example, most of the current employees will be unemployed in the future and it can lead to big problems.
Moreover
, even though improvements in
technology
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the technology
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 field, there are times when some devices can not be controlled because of happening break downs and
thus
 accidents could happen. İn conclusion,
i
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I
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 think that
its
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it's
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 plus points
excel
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 minus points
due to
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i
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I
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 counted reasons.
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