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Nowadays people are not fit and active as before. These will have negative effect in the future health. What are the reasons and solutions to this issue?

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The fact that these days people don't have as much activity as they had in the past is concerning as
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 will negatively result in their upcoming future health. In my opinion, the main reason for
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 issue is how compressed the time for everyone to do their essential tasks in a day,
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 as working, studying, etc. One effective way to turn back
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 gap into its old situation can be the advertisements. With technology spreading all around the world, revolutionizing all aspects of a human's life, making everyday duties easier to do, and reducing the need for more physical movements, it is hard to expect a crowd's fitness conditions to be the same as in old times. Obviously, there would be no place to take a distance by foot when all the science around us is taking the responsibility to do
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 for us in faster and more suitable ways.
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 replacement between human actions and machines is a novel phenomenon
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 playing the main role in damaging the nation's health and is staying in the process of being stirred. The great news is that human is now aware of
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 problem and fortunately, its main source.
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 made the idea for relevant managers to find a solution to
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 problem. One considerable way to control
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 machinery world is definitely in the hands of advertisements. Without a doubt, the power of propagation was confirmed through history many times, and will again be remarkable in the way of bringing back the healthcare our grandparents On the whole, society getting away from being fit and healthy is caused mostly because of the growth of technology in nowadays human life and
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 can be put back to an acceptable level with just a creative fashion of advertising.
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