The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.
The two bar graphs illustrate what United Kingdom graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time
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study at 29665 and 2725 people
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work
at 3500 and 345 people
, respectively.
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graduates
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was unemployment at 16235 and 1625 people
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