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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be a good members of society. Other, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.

#people #parents #children #members #society #school #place
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In the contemporary world,
people
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 are in a hurry
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 their busy work routine.
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, society needs good future generations for the sake of
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 development. Some
people
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 think that
parents
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 are responsible for
children
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's upbringing and teach good manners to them.
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, some argue that our educational institutes are the place to learn
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. I will expatiate both views in the following upcoming paragraphs and
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 state my opinion later in
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 with,
people
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 who believe that
children
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 learn from their
parents
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 at home because it is the first institute for any child.
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, basic education.
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, how to greet others
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 meeting others. Eating and sitting.
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, how to speak and behave nicely.
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, learners learn good things and become a gentle or kind human community.
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, the mother 24/7 is with their offspring and it is more convenient for her to teach them.
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,
people
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 who opine the view that schools and colleges are the places to learn these things. Our present education systems include ethical books in the curriculum.
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,
children
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 spend most of their time in academic institutes. We call it a second house for them.
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, teachers are educating them and encouraging them to develop new skills.
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, In schools, teachers share some stories related to humanity and behaviour
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 teaching other subjects.
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, I strongly believe that, it is a mutual responsibility of both of them. Like, teachers and
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teach and foster their kid's good manners.
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,
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 their efforts
children
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 become more sensible and responsible members of society.
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, both of them are very close to
children
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 and spend time with them. So, school is the place where you grow and learn how to deal with things in the world with confidence and
parents
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 should appreciate and encourage them to be the best version of themselves.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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