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The chart below show the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in New Port city center from 2003 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below show the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in New Port city center from 2003 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the variation of three different crimes in New Port City
center
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 from 2003 to 2012.
Overall
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 there was a reduction in all
the
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three areas of crimes
during
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from
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 2003 to 2012. It was noticeable the reduction in
Burlgary
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burglary
 and car theft
while
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, in Robbery the trend was steady. First of all, I will describe the trends of Bulgary. In 2003 there were reported around 3500
incidents
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on
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 these crimes.
Then
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, there was a
sharply
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 reduction between the years 2004 and 2008.
However
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, it can be observed that from that year until 2012, the trend
was
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stabilized in about 1400
incidents
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.
Secondly
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, I will describe car theft crime. In 2003 there were reported about 2700
incidents
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. During the next
years
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 there
were
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 a
slightly
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 decline in
the
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crime.
Then
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,
arround
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around
 the year 2008 the trend
was
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stabilized until the year 2012.
Adittionally
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Additionally
, it is worth noting that Robbery had
little
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 fluctuation in the number of
incidents
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 during the period of time
analized
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analysed
, with a report number of about 600.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words incidents with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "describe" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduction" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • changes
  • took place
  • three different areas of crime
  • New Port city center
  • from 2003 to 2012
  • summarise
  • information
  • selecting
  • reporting
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • where relevant
  • overall
  • crime rates
  • downward trend
  • most significant drop
  • observed
  • theft
  • burglary
  • on the other hand
  • slight increase
  • drug-related offenses
  • same period
  • declined steadily
  • significant decrease
  • 10-year period
  • in contrast
  • slight decline
  • remaining years
  • violent crimes
  • relatively stable
  • slight fluctuation
  • conclusion
  • recorded
  • small increase
  • initially
  • then declined slightly
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