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The map presents us the modify of seaside resort Templeton that happened period between 1990 and 2005.

The map presents us the modify of seaside resort Templeton that happened period between 1990 and 2005.
#modify #resort #templeton #period
The map shows us the changes
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 the seaside Templeton resort from 1990 to 2005.
Overall
 there were dramatic changes at the north and north-west of the map.
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North
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 they built a brand new Airpot
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at
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 North-west it
was develop
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 a Supermarket. There
was
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also
 constructed
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new
residencial
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residential
 units close to the sea and previous houses were modernized.
Firstly
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 describe other areas that
were develop
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. Close to the sea,
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 the
east
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 we could see they built a factory. And for
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contructiont
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construction
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 had to cut
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 a forest. Close to the lake a house
was demolish
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, a new
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residential
residencial
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residential
 units were built
ASecondly
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Secondly
, we can identify that there was some modification in transportation. A new ferry was built.
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, it can be observed
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 a
rail way
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 was
contructed
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constructed
 along the sea line.,
conecting
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connecting
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diferents
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different
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 they built a bridge over the river.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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