The diagram illustrates how steel rods are manufactured in the furniture industry. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram illustrates how steel rods are manufactured in the furniture industry. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
As an introduction, the diagram gives information on the process of making steel rods with raw materials in the furniture industry.
Overall
, it is a linear process which includes ten stages of manufacturing these goods, starting from basic ingredients to the distribution of the final product.
Firstly
, the required quantity of iron ore, yellow ore and carbon is melted in the melting slit with a high temperature of 1300 -1500 centigrades.
Secondly
,
this
product goes through refinement in a smelting cabin in order to make condescending metal.
Thirdly
, these condescend particles are poured into ingots, which are connected to a cooling reservoir with a temperature of 60 -100 centigrades to produce strands of cooled metal.
Thereafter
, these solid materials are rolled with the help of rollers and
then
heated in a heating machine. After that, the sizing of rods is done using a cutter, after the surface check has been completed by measuring the automaton.
Finally
, the final product is distributed after the completion of ID stamping and inspection.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diagram
  • manufacturing
  • steel rods
  • furniture industry
  • steel billets
  • furnace
  • rollers
  • diameter
  • coiled
  • wire reels
  • cooling process
  • sprayed
  • temperature
  • harden
  • cut
  • bundled
  • distribution
  • furniture manufacturers
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