In many countries, people incresingly talk about money such as how much they earn or how much they pay for things in their daily conversations. Why? Is this a positive or negative treand?

It has become increasingly pervasive in recent years for individuals to discuss
money
matters on a daily basis. In my opinion,
this
is
due to
changes in what individuals consider polite and is a decidedly negative trend on the whole. The reason
people
now talk about
money
is
that is
socially acceptable. In past generations, discussing
money
was considered “in poor taste” and most
people
were reserved in order to not appear arrogant or disparate. Today, many social norms from the past have disappeared and
this
includes ones related to the discussion of one’s finances.
This
enables the average person to discuss
money
with friends and family as a way of coping with anxieties about the future or insecurities about their own status in society.
For instance
, it is common for some wealthy individuals to show off by talking about their investments, property, and so on to impress friends and elevate their own self-esteem. Discussing
money
is
overall
a negative trend as it exacerbates an unhealthy mindset. There are situations where it can be positive,
such
as when discussing potential investments and helping friends. These contexts are the exceptions,
however
, as most
people
simply talk about
money
to relieve their own nervousness or as a form of bragging. Once a person becomes addicted to the minor dopamine bursts that accompany seeking self-pity or self-aggrandizement, they will have a difficult time transitioning to more productive and fun topics of conversation. Over time, a person may ironically increase their anxieties and insecurities by seeking to cope with them. In conclusion,
people
talk about their finances as it is no longer considered rude and it is an
unheathly
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habit. It is better to talk about
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more important topics.
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