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The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the disadvantages. Do you agree or disagree?

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The most hazardous technology ever created by humanity, nuclear power, is thought to be capable of destroying all life on Earth.
Although
 nuclear
energy
 plays an imperative role in contributing to the production and development of society, it has had many consequential effects on the environment. I disagree that its benefits could prevail over its drawbacks. On the one hand, the initial application of nuclear applicability was for military purposes,
such
 as generating nuclear weapons or nuclear bombs.
In other words
, the government can utilize
this
 high-risk source to provoke a brutal war. A prime illustration of the juggernaut of nuclear weapons can be seen in the previous century
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 when World War II escalated to its peak intensity. Two atomic bombs were delivered to destroy two cities in Japan by the United States.
This
 horrifying event resulted in thousands of deaths and the remnant of buildings.
On the other hand
, nuclear power is now virtually no longer a threat to the existence of mankind because of the peace treaty.
Furthermore
, it is being exploited to provide
energy
 in many aspects of our lives.
However
, that source of
energy
 has been substantiated to detrimentally impinge on the quality of the environment.
For example
, in China, Beijing’s air quality reached the highest alert level
due to
 the exhaust from vast nuclear factories in the nearby area. It is reckoned that breathing unmasked in the air of Beijing is equivalent to smoking 18 cigarette packs per day. In conclusion, though nowadays the usage of nuclear
energy
 for industrial purposes could somehow appease people’s anguish over
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,
this
 source of
energy
 is not less harmful, as it severely damages the environment.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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