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The three pie charts introduce the change in annual spending by native authorities in Someland in 1980,1990 and 2000.

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The three pie charts introduce the change in annual spending by native authorities in Someland in 1980,1990 and 2000.
The most
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 of the expenditures were spent on higher education,
also
 the smallest expenses were spent on environmental services. Spending on higher education was 35 per
cent
 in
one
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apply
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thousand nine hundred and eighty, in 1990 percentage is around a half(45%), in
two thousandths
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percentage
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 is forty
per
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cent
.
Percentage
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The percentage
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 of environmental services increased from 4 per
cent
 to nine. Costs on other stuff decreased from six per
cent
 to 1%. Spending on transportation fell sharply from sixteen per
cent
 to 6,
then
 grew up to 22.
It is clear that
 all
expenditure
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expenditures
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 go to higher education than in other areas
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