The bar chart shows the results of the survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London thought of the city
The bar chart illustrates what citizens in London thought of different
aspects
of the city in three years.
Overall
, the range of shops was repeatedly regarded as the best facet of this
city by the largest proportion of Londoners, followed by employment opportunities and the diversity of people
. While
the only aspect that saw a steady rise in approval rates was museums & art
galleries, the city’s nightlife and transport system witnessed some fluctuation.
Regarding Correct word choice
and art
aspects
with the highest rate of approval, 45% of respondents in the survey chose the variety of shops in London as the best thing about life in this
city in year
1, with subsequent slight fluctuation in the next two years. Meanwhile, although
people
were slightly more likely to give good ratings to the availability of jobs than the diversity of people
in the first year
, these aspects
then
saw good ratings drop slightly to exactly 35% in the third year
of the survey.
As for the other aspects
, which have lower approvals, museums & art
galleries, Correct word choice
and art
along with
transport, received the same approval rate of 22.5% in year
1, but proportionally, more people
rated them as the best facets of life in London, with respective figures of 26% and 25%. Finally
, nightlife’s rating dropped significantly from 25% in year
1 to 20% in year
2, before bouncing back to 22% in year
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