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Climate change is the biggest threat to life on our planet How accurate is this statement? Are there any other big threats to mankind?

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Climate
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 is the largest and most pervasive threat to nature, the environment, and societies that the world has ever experienced.
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 view because
climate
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 reduces the amount of food available, which is a threat to humankind but
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 to artificial intelligence since it will be difficult to control.
Humans
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 and wild animals face new challenges for survival because of
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 an Intergovernmental Panel on
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 (IPCC) special report, crop yields have already begun to decline
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 of rising temperatures, changing precipitation patterns, and extreme weather events. Meanwhile, studies have shown that increased carbon dioxide in the atmosphere can leach plants of zinc, iron, and
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 that
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 need to survive. Malnutrition is linked to a variety of illnesses, including heart disease, cancer, and diabetes. It can
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 increase the risk of stunting, or impaired growth, in children, which can harm cognitive function. If artificial intelligence is deployed carelessly and left to become too powerful, I believe thinking machines could become more dominant, sophisticated, and evolved than
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. After taking over jobs, AI can eventually cause a global catastrophe that can wipe out mankind or push
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 to extinction.
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, in a future in which civilization relies extensively on robots, a computer virus with AI capability could become a weapon for a malevolent cyberattack. "If the attack is on a very large scale, affecting billions of sophisticated robots with a large degree of autonomy, it may result in human extinction." People around the world are witnessing firsthand how
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 can wreak havoc on the planet because
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 crisis can lead to insecure food.
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, AI is
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 a big threat to humankind when it surpasses human capabilities
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 and eventually causes the extinction of the human race.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ecosystems
  • natural disasters
  • rising sea levels
  • endangerment of species
  • economic implications
  • fishery yields
  • climate change
  • disaster recovery
  • infectious diseases
  • air and water pollution
  • nuclear war
  • pandemics
  • artificial intelligence
  • scope
  • pervasive impact
  • exacerbate
  • resource scarcity
  • disease outbreaks
  • territorial disputes
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