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The map show the changes that took place in the bookstore before and after 2000.

The map show the changes that took place in the bookstore before and after 2000.
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The map compares the differences
about
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in
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 the construction of the bookstore in 2000 and today.
Overall
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, in the past, the bookstore used to have two large bookshelves of
fictions
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fiction
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 and no table for sitting there. Today, there
are
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is
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 seating
area
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 for readers and there are a non-
fiction
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 bookshelf
instead
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 of
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fiction
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a fiction
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 one. As can be seen from the maps, there used to have two large areas for
fiction
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 bookshelves
in
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on
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 the left side
from
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of
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 the entrance.
However
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, the
fiction
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 one is reduced in size now because these areas are converted into 5
differents
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different
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area
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areas
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such
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 as art, hobbies, cookery,
fiction
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, and non-
fiction
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 in the same areas.
In addition
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, there are three tables which are replaced next to
non-
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the non-fiction
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fiction
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area
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. In the
area
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 which is near
entrance
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the entrance
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, there was the same as
the
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in the
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 past with 3 zones
such
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 as travel, new books,
service
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and service
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 desk.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, today, there was a new cafe
instead
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 of non-
fiction
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 which used to be there in the past.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "instead, such".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, fiction with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • layout
  • renovation
  • facilities
  • digitalization
  • footprint
  • inventory
  • customer service
  • browsing experience
  • accessibility
  • enhancements
  • modernization
  • space utilization
  • technology integration
  • customer preferences
  • retail trends
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