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Some people think that traditional education is better than online education.To what extent do you agree or dissagree?

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In
this
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 technologically advanced era, we have
opportunity
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 to
recive
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receive
education
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 in both online and
offline
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. Some opine that
education
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 through the screen can never be the
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similar
 as
face to face
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education
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,
others
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while others
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 think the opposite. I,
however
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, agree with the former view.
This
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 essay tends to discuss the points of my view. Generally speaking,
education
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 is a basic need for everyone. People who live in rural
area
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 can learn
advance
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 lessons through online
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, working people not only can develop their skills by using
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 but
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 can improve
there
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their
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earning
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,
while
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 working.
Dispite
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Despite
 all
off
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 the
benifits
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benefits
 online
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 can never be as
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similar
as
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offline
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education
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. It will hardly match the class environment which, is essential for the pupil in the long run in their lives.
One
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 the other hand,
offline
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educatoin
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education
 offers students close observation of the teacher. They can help their students to do more practical tasks,
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and reasearches
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reasearches
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research
, and can provide extra
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lessons
 if needed . Children will learn to do
team work
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teamwork
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 and sharing. Which, will help them in their
leter
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later
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 life. They can
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 take initiatives to help their friends or other people of the organization, which, will teach them to do volunteer work. In
school
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,school
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 children can do
extra curricular
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extracurricular
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 activities, like; theatre, dance, sports,
sing
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, and many more. All
these
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 will develop their creativity and will help them to find out their passion.
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, traditional
education
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 always offers more
benifit
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benefits
benefit
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then
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than
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 online
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. We can be so much advance in every
sectors
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 of our life, but still now
offline
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education
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 has special value .

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