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Part 1: The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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The plans display how a public
park
 used to be in 1920 when it was opened and the current
park
 at the moment.
Overall
, Numerous things have been restructured within the
park
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parking
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 area and new features are
also
 been constructed.
However
, the entrance has been the same. In the year 1920, the types of amenities which were available have completely been renovated in the present time. The seats which used to be in every corner of Grange
Park
 in 1920 have been situated together covering all dimensions of
Rose
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the Rose
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 Garden after replacing the Water Fountain
at
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in
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 the present day. Shows of Musicians which used to be held on the stage have currently been reconstructed into an Amphitheatre for accommodating people for concerts.
Furthermore
, new amenities have been established
such
 as Cafe, Children's play area, entrance for underground parking and Water feature which was previously obtained by Glasshouse and a pond.
In addition
, the rose garden has diminished in numbers which leads to more space to accompany most individuals in the
park
.
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