In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?
Although
the advances made in farming, many individuals worldwide still go hungry. There are several reasons for this
issue
including, poverty, and climate
change
, however
, there are different can taken
by Change the verb form
be taken
governments
to address this
issue
namely, affluent countries
could support poor nations, and international laws
could introduce to fight climate
change
.
On the one hand, The primary reason why some people
struggle with hunger despite of
the advances made in agriculture is poverty. To illustrate, some Change preposition
apply
people
struggle financially especially
in developing Add the comma(s)
,especially
countries
, which mean
Correct subject-verb agreement
means
people
in these countries
do not have enough money to purchase food such
as,
grains, Remove the comma
apply
furits
, Correct your spelling
fruits
vegetables
. Correct word choice
and vegetables
Climate
change
is another reason for this
problem. This
is because climate
change
increase
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increases
a
chance of natural disasters namely, floods, droughts, and fires. Correct article usage
the
Therefore
, increase
Correct article usage
an increase
these
natural disasters can contribute to Change preposition
in these
destroy
of crops and grains, which Change the verb form
destroying
make
Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
people
suffering
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suffer
with
a lack of food.
Change preposition
from
On the other hand
, there are many actions can
Correct pronoun usage
that can
taken
by Change the verb form
be taken
governments
around the world to alleviate this
issue
. The first effective measure the industrialized nations could provide financial aid for underdevelopment countries
in order to improve living standards in these countries
. As a result
, developing countries
can use these
aid to provide affordable or free agricultural goods for their citizens. The second efficient solution, Correct determiner usage
this
Add a missing verb
is the
the
Correct your spelling
that
governments
worldwide could work together to fight climate
change
. For example
, governments
around the world could introduce harsh laws
against burn out fossil fuels in order to mtigate
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mitigate
climate
change
, which this
Change the determiner
this law
these laws
laws
can boosts
agriculture sectors worldwide.
Change the verb form
boost
To sum up
, Form
my perspective, there are several reasons why Correct your spelling
From
people
around the world suffer from famine although
the advances made in agriculture including, poverty, and climate
change
, however
, I suggested some solutions to tackle this
issue
namely, wealthy countries
could offer financial aid for developing countries
, and international laws
could introduce to fight climate
change
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