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In the future it may be necessary for us to live on other planets. For this reason, some people believe that we should spend money now to research other planets, such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The
Earth
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 has always been the only planet where humans, animals and plants could be able to survive through many
eons
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 of time.
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, some
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 opine that
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 should be spent on researching other asteroids to live in the future
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 as Mars, meanwhile, in my opinion, gathering information about
planets
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 is a positive aspect but focusing on solving
Earth
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's problems sounds more realistic.
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 with, humanity is currently facing serious ecological issues that need to be solved as soon as possible
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 as the phenomenon of climate change or environmental pollution which adversely affect humanity everywhere in the world and should take priority over other issues. In fact, the increasing consumption of natural resources
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 as gas, oil and coal has resulted in numerous amounts of carbon emissions being released into the atmosphere, which degrades air quality and accelerates climate change.
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, the consequences of these phenomena are very serious as it affects human
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,
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,
people
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 may suffer from dangerous diseases
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 as cancer or respiratory diseases or
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 are suffering from extreme natural phenomena
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 as floods, soil erosion or erratic heat.
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, prioritizing the investment of budgets in the discovery of other habitable
planets
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 is a very expensive undertaking and no scientist can affirm with certainty that it will succeed in finding signs of
life
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 for
people
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 on these new
planets
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. Indeed, if the study of these new
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 is not successful, humanity has wasted a huge amount of money that could be spent on more real activities
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 as planting trees to create forests or investing in community funds to support patients with serious diseases.
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, when we invest in these urgent issues, we do not need to find or move to another planet because
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 our
earth
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 has improved and become a prosperous planet where
people
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 can live in peace and contentment. In short,
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 spending a lot of money on space research is quite helpful in finding new
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 for humans, I firmly assert that eliminating environmental problems and keeping the
Earth
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 healthy for
life
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 is the smartest use of the budget.
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