Children today are overweight and in poor health. Give reasons for this and give solutions to help fix the problem.
Children
today live a very different lifestyle compared to past generations. Many of them are overweight and in need of help. This
essay will examine the reasons why children
are obese and what solutions are available to help them.
In terms of children
being ,overweight there are many reasons for it. First of all spread of junk food
restaurants is everywhere. This
shop offers delicious food
at a good price. They drop toys with meals and put play space to attract kids. In , fact people now are addicted to this
restaurant. Second children
do not do any exercise. Not only that but also
they spend the whole day playing video games. missing activity leads to an increase in weight and in the future they will face serious medical problems. Finally
the children
's diet. It is the main reason why children
got overweight. Be eating unhealthy food
all day. For ,example eating a big dessert after the meal and candy and chocolate between the meal cause fat.
There are many solutions to children
's overweight issue. First by
Change preposition
apply
parent
Fix the agreement mistake
parents
controlling
and Wrong verb form
control
observing
of child's lifestyle. parents are supposed to insert sports and exercise into the daily routine of the child. Encourage them to go to the gym and play outside. By monitoring their diet and inserting healthy Wrong verb form
observe
food
they will lose weight. ,Second by stopping eating junk food
and oily food
By letting eat this
type of food
they will be more healthy and fit. Food
cooking with large amounts of oil is dangerous for their life. ,,,,
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apply
Finally
there is some medical solution for abnormal situations. For ,example some kids have Add a comma
,Finally
a medical issues
like gland problems or voracity in eating Correct the article-noun agreement
medical issues
a medical issue
food
. In this
,condition child needs a doctor's consultation.Submitted by alfred on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite