In traditional or religious festivals. during festival periods people nowadays only want to enjoy themselves to what extent you agree or disagree with this opinion?
In
this
contemporary era, it is argued that people nowadays want themselves to set
free and only enjoy during festivals and traditional occasions. In my opinion, I completely agree with Add a missing verb
be set
this
statement because they are completely influenced by social media and it provides them the instant gratification.
In conclusion, I wholeheartedly agree that individuals are showing interest in enjoying their special cultural occasions because of the dependency and influence on platforms like facebook
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Instagram
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the satisfaction that they gain due to
social gatherings.Submitted by chandralekha1993 on
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Expand your ideas with clear and relevant examples to strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Organize your essay into separate paragraphs for introduction, main points, and conclusion.
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Elaborate on each main point to ensure your ideas are comprehensive and well-developed.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are clear and provide a straightforward response to the prompt.
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The main points you raised—social media influence and instant gratification—are relevant to the topic.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite
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