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The two maps below show the site of a college in 2006 and the present day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show the site of a college in 2006 and the present day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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These two given maps illustrate the location of different Lynwich
campus's
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campus
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 sections in 2006
beside
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besides
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 their present layouts.
Overall
, Lynwich
college
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College
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 has been
dramatic
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through dramatic
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 transformations throughout
this
 mentioned time.
Whereas
 it has lost a considerable amount of its green places
along with
 a lot of trees, some new man-made constructions have been added to
this
 site and the transportation system
also
have
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has
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 been expanded. At first glance,
it is clear that
 some new buildings have been built in
this
 region
such
 as
new
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a new
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 cafeteria that has been constructed in the central part of
this
 area and
new
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a new
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 bus stop
that is
 located to the south of
main
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 road.
Moreover
, some places
such
 as
library
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the library
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has
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 been moved to the southeastern part of
college
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the college
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 location and the old building of
library
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the library
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along with
 a small part of
former
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the former
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 sports field has been transformed into
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a sport
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sport
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sports
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center
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centre
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and
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apply
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for achieving
this
 purpose, building a sports
center
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,
sport
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sports
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 fields that were located below the old library building has been shrunk.
Additionally
, the former car park has been shrunk as well for installing
a
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bike storage for students' and teachers' bicycles.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • underwent significant changes
  • consisted of
  • large open space
  • utilized
  • relocated
  • limited facilities and amenities
  • wider range of facilities and amenities
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