Adult youths are often called up for working development of communities. Some people say that they should be paid other say that they should not be pair. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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divided on the issue of whether the youngster of today should be paid in term of communal production or whether others believe that they should do

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them for their deeds, they will get

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to complete their demands.

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of abundance money. They are willing

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to do crimes, which is bringing an adverse development.

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, they should be paid.

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have a statistic of valid reasons. They think, by doing

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job they can enhance their skills like communication

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and, even can make their resume heavy.

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main intention is to be a doctor, nurse or other business which are related to the civil service.

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work will play like

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them or make them productive to serve the nation. Both views have various

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the figure of disadvantages is less than advantages.

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