The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
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The table and chart illustrate data about police
finanacial
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financial
plan
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plans
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during
two
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consequence
years
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(2017, 2018) in one region in Britain. The table displays information about financial
sources
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whereas
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charts give information about allocations by sphere.
Overall
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, more than half of the budget came from National
Governement
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government
during that period another
part
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of it
built
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by local taxes mainly and from other
sources
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a small
part
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of it. Exploring the distribution of finances
its
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obvious that about
three-fourth
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three-fourths
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of them were shared for salaries in mentioned
two
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years
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. Infrastructure expenses remained the same
while
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technology funding has increased
nearl
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nearly
two
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-fold.
Firstly
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, from
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the table
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table
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we can see that police annual finances in 2017 and 2018 mainly came from
National
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the National
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governement
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government
and local taxes
while
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only
smallest
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the smallest
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part
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only from other
sources
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. National
Governement
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government
allocations were 175,5 and 177,8
millions
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million
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of
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pound
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respectively during above mentioned
two
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years
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whereas
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income from local taxes rose about 10
percent
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per cent
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.
Secondly
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, from
displayed
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chart is evident that about three-fouth
part
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of
finances
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the finances
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were spent
for
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on
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salaries with
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decreased in 2018.
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for
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infrastructure allocated the same amount of
sources
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in
two
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consequent
years
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while
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technology funding rose by 6
percent
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per cent
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas, while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words two, years, sources, part with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "displays" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 6 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • government policies
  • economic conditions
  • community services
  • crime prevention
  • public safety
  • significant increase/decrease
  • distribution
  • assessment
  • reflection
  • allocation shifts
  • budget comparison
  • impact analysis
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