The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and

2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and

the charts show how it was distributed.
The table and chart illustrate data about police
finanacial
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financial
plan
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plans
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during
two
consequence
years
(2017, 2018) in one region in Britain. The table displays information about financial
sources
whereas
charts give information about allocations by sphere.
Overall
, more than half of the budget came from National
Governement
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government
during that period another
part
of it
built
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by local taxes mainly and from other
sources
a small
part
of it. Exploring the distribution of finances
its
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obvious that about
three-fourth
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of them were shared for salaries in mentioned
two
years
. Infrastructure expenses remained the same
while
technology funding has increased
nearl
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nearly
two
-fold.
Firstly
, from
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the table
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table
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we can see that police annual finances in 2017 and 2018 mainly came from
National
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the National
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governement
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government
and local taxes
while
only
smallest
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the smallest
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part
only from other
sources
. National
Governement
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government
allocations were 175,5 and 177,8
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of
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pound
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respectively during above mentioned
two
years
whereas
income from local taxes rose about 10
percent
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.
Secondly
, from
displayed
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the displayed
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chart is evident that about three-fouth
part
of
finances
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the finances
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were spent
for
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salaries with
slightly
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decreased in 2018.
On the other hand
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infrastructure allocated the same amount of
sources
in
two
consequent
years
while
technology funding rose by 6
percent
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per cent
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • government policies
  • economic conditions
  • community services
  • crime prevention
  • public safety
  • significant increase/decrease
  • distribution
  • assessment
  • reflection
  • allocation shifts
  • budget comparison
  • impact analysis
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