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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It would be argued by some that specialists who are doctors and engineers should have
freedom
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the freedom
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 to choose
workplace
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 where they want to do after graduating. In my opinion, it would be more beneficial for them to work in the
country
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 where they learnt and did their training. On the one hand, there are a number of reasons why some believe that professionals should work in the
country
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 where they
trained
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. The first reason is that they have a lot of opportunities to find jobs
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 develop themselves comprehensively.
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, they will have access to the environment and working methods in that
country
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 at
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 early age in order to avoid being surprised when applying
their
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knowledge
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 learnt at their schools. These
also
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 help countries tackle the shortage of trained professionals.
For instance
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, you cannot apply the economic
knowledge
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 you have learnt in foreign countries
such
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 as the United States, the United Kingdom, France,
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etc,
into
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 the Vietnamese economy, because those nations teach you about the
knowledge
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 of the economy of a developed
country
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, and Vietnam is a developing one.
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, working in any
countries
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country
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 can provide professionals with better career opportunities and the ability to work in environments that may be more suited to their personal interests and needs.
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, it allows for a better global exchange of
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 and ideas. To demonstrate, a doctor, after graduating from a certain
country
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, can return to his or her home
country
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 to contribute to their
country
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's medical system. In conclusion, I believe that working in the
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 where they had
a
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training can help them a lot
as well as
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 address the lack of skilled workers
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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