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The chart below show the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in New Port city center from 2003 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below show the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in New Port city center from 2003 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 provided chart illustrates three different types of offences which occurred in New port city, over a period of 9 years, and
also
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 it explains the
rate
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 of changes in these crimes.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the
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 of
burglary
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 occurrence started more than car theft, but the end was the opposite.
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, in 2003,
burglary
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 happened, about 3450
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 which was considered the highest
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 of crime compared to others in the same year. Even though there was a slight increase in
burglary
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 that reached to peak, in 2004, to be greater than 3500
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, it dropped dramatically to around 1200
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, in 2008.
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 to that, in 2003, car theft occurrence was lower than
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, at about 2600
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, and it declined in the mid of 2006 to about 2100
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, after ,that it remained constant until it intersected with
burglary
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 at the same point, about 2150
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.
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,
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 robbery was initiated at a very low
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 in comparison to others, at about 500
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, it continued with very minimal change in its
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 over the given period to stop at nearly the same
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 that it began.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, burglary, times with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • changes
  • took place
  • three different areas of crime
  • New Port city center
  • from 2003 to 2012
  • summarise
  • information
  • selecting
  • reporting
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • where relevant
  • overall
  • crime rates
  • downward trend
  • most significant drop
  • observed
  • theft
  • burglary
  • on the other hand
  • slight increase
  • drug-related offenses
  • same period
  • declined steadily
  • significant decrease
  • 10-year period
  • in contrast
  • slight decline
  • remaining years
  • violent crimes
  • relatively stable
  • slight fluctuation
  • conclusion
  • recorded
  • small increase
  • initially
  • then declined slightly
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