Some people assert that it is good for college students to have part-time jobs. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Some
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think that it is good for college students to have part-time
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. And I would agree with getting part-time
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when
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are in college. There are several reasons that getting an occupation is good for college students including my experience.
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, They can have various experiences if they have part-time
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. It is not easy to get
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when they are high school students. So they don't have a chance to do lots of things they want.
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, they just go to school and meet only friends. Through getting part-time
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, they can have wide experiences and face many different
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.
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a result, they could realize
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what is the best thing for them and what should they do in the future. It could be
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helpful to find their future dream. To take myself as an example, I did a part-time job when I was 20 and 21. I was a student and an employee. I worked at the supermarket as a cashier and at the wine store. I had to meet bad and interesting
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at those. It makes me tired.
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those were terrible experiences, I got a
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lesson. I could know that I prefer to talk with
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and recommend the good they want. Of course, my communication skill improved a lot
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working. In conclusion, having part-time
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would increase your life skill in various parts
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as communication skills and
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skills. And you can learn what are good points to attract
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. It could look non-worth, but everything you had experienced would become help you anytime.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • time management
  • practical experience
  • competitive edge
  • responsibility
  • financial independence
  • budgeting
  • academic performance
  • relevance
  • professional network
  • burnout
  • balance
  • accountability
  • maturity
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