Many people see animals as tools to be used by humans to better their lives. They believe animals should help feed us and keep us healthy by being subjects to experiments that will lead to new medications and medical processes. Others believe that animals should have the same rights to a good life as humans. Discuss both views and state your own.

Lots of people consider
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from the point of
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instrument for improving their lives. They trust in the fact that
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exist on our planet to support them with food and serve them in different tests
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are supposed to improve our medical knowledge. On the other side, there are many individuals who believe that
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are our elder brothers. In
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essay, I am planning to discuss these two points of view and clarify my own . I am pretty sure that it is
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hard discussion because every point has a huge amount of believers. On the one side, all of us are Good's creations on Earth and we have to be able to live together peacefully. Human beings' activities are more harmful to the environment
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the animal's safety,
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we need to understand
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aspect - we are responsible for the healthy life chain in the world. Obviously, we should remember that
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never kill other
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beings without need. If it is in our power, we should take care of
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. On the other side, a human being is
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an animal with its own abilities, instincts and behaviours.
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, he is a predator. Since a life instinct is the most prior one, he will always find ways to survive, to improve his own life. In
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he will use
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as an auxiliary tool for these times.
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, if a few
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could help us to invent new medicine and save the lives of millions
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, we would immolate them, even if we are sad about it. In conclusion, people should take care of
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and
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highly forbidden to kill them without need, but we need food,
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animals
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will always be the main source of our meals.

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clarity
State your own view clearly in the first paragraph and keep a clear line of thought.
grammar
Use simple and correct words, fix errors like 'on the one side' to 'on the one hand' and 'mouses' to 'mice'.
content
Give more real reasons and short, easy examples for each view.
structure
Make sure each paragraph has one main idea and a clear topic sentence.
coherence
Connect ideas well with simple linking words: firstly, also, but, however, for example, therefore.
content
The essay talks about two sides and gives a final view.
structure
It suggests a good plan: intro, body, conclusion.
coherence
There is effort to use linking words and examples.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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