The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.
The bar graph illustrates the total
number
of
minutes
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by
billions
of telephone calls in the
united
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Kingdom, in three kinds of
call
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calls
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, over 7 years.
Overall
,
it is clear that
calls by local -fixed line
was
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were
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highest
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the highest
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numbe
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number
in the UK during
given
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a given
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period ,
whereas
mobiles
was
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were
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least
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number
.
Furthermore
, calls by
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local-fixed
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was
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increased over
given
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period but at certain years showed
decline
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a decline
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,
while
others
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other
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forms of
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the call
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call
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calls
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showed raised . Looking at
bar
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the bar
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chart in more detail, In 1995 the local -fixed line was the highest
number
of
foms
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forms
of
call
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calls
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approximately 72
minutes
(
billions
) .
In contrast
, mobiles
was
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were
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lowest
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number
at around 3 72
minutes
(
billions
). In 1999,
local -fixed
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local-fixed
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reached a peak at almost 90
minutes
(
billions
) and after
that
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,that
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it showed
decreased
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decrease
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and in 2002 at
lowed
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the lowed
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point at around 72
minutes
(
billions
). In comparison,
2002
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in 2002
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both national and international -fixed line and
moblies
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mobiles
mobile
movies
at their highest point at 60 and 46
minutes
(
billions
), respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, minutes, billions with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number
  • minutes
  • telephone calls
  • UK
  • divided into
  • categories
  • from
  • to
  • overall
  • increased significantly
  • local fixed-line calls
  • accounted for
  • largest proportion
  • throughout
  • period
  • international calls
  • highest rate of growth
  • experiencing
  • sharp increase
  • national long-distance calls
  • remained relatively stable
  • slight decline
  • towards
  • end
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